The Hector Hoctor Tree

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Thank you very much for your feedback, i really appreciate it! i admit i had not even thought about punctuation/capitalization, and am a bit unsure as to how to proceed in that regard (normally i just cap all lines and punctuate sparsely), so hopefully the below is a step forward.

Here is a revised version:

On mound of grey,
contained by snow,
arbour flayed raw
bends, gasps, and moans.

Stained green with black
defies the frost,
holds pinched dry fruit,
red blood of ox.

For none but He,
or It, or She --
there far beyond
our salted wall,
that salted pond,

mortal gasp of
timeless scree,
stands, persists
the Hoctor tree.