Transitory Unease

[yourlocalaliyen]

Transitory Unease

If life is like water and flows unrestrained, Good metaphor
How do I adapt when wind turns the vane? Instead of 'I' maybe 'We' if you meant it in a general perspective

A tough one to ponder, as fog fills the valley, What do you mean by fog? The uncertainties of life?
How will we move forward with sight so opaque?

I ask you these questions for when the ground shakes, Maybe instead of 'I' put 'We'? And nix the word 'you'
It will break, it will crumble, but it will remain.

Ice does not fear death for it is just changed, Just confused...what does this mean?
But with it’s new remnants it has a new name. Not it's. Its.

You can fight your way out of whatever you please, 
But until you let go, you will never change phase. 

Go on as you will but just think of this,
Without money or fame you can still live in bliss. Perfection honestly

Sooo, I made some suggestions above. I didn't have much to say about it, and these are just opinions. I loved your poem overall and the message was very moving to me. Please continue to write and I look forward to your next piece.