10-07-2025, 06:17 AM
I found your poem to be deeply moving, and honestly, I relate to it quite a bit. Fear can be like a shackle, and I think you described that very well here. The sensory images, such as "taste the raindrops again or your birthday cake or the tongue of your lover" are a good addition to your piece, because they describe how fear can cloud your judgement and hold you back from actually living your life. And the line "it slips into your lunch" is a good way to describe how fear is everywhere, and you can't avoid it or run from it because it will always be there. Overall, I loved your piece, and I hope you continue to write.