09-25-2025, 12:56 AM
I did mean "piece" as a double meaning in my last line, thanks fro noticing! You make a very valid point of the quality my work not being able to to support this format. Frankly, I don't care. I think that expression in poetry should be the number 1 priority, no matter of the conventions or the tradition. This weird little gimmick also in interesting to me, as it shows how out of breath the narrator feels. Overall, thank you for taking your time to care about my piece, but I refuse to conform to the standard on this poem specifically.