09-07-2025, 05:16 AM
edit2;
You’re old, almost
as old as I am now–
Surely you’ve walked
into a second or third room
and wondered why
you came...
then found a glass
part-full of wine
in your hand
that you’d thought was empty.
Thanks, now, to both critics. To @brynmawr1, specifically: you're right, the last stanza was an afterthought - and an attempt to make it clear the "you" is a person being addressed rather than a generic observation about one's own experience. Without it, the reader will have to figure that out for himself - as well as whether the surprise is that the glass wasn't empty, or the hand was not
.
You’re old, almost
as old as I am now–
Surely you’ve walked
into a second or third room
and wondered why
you came...
then found a glass
part-full of wine
in your hand
that you’d thought was empty.
Thanks, now, to both critics. To @brynmawr1, specifically: you're right, the last stanza was an afterthought - and an attempt to make it clear the "you" is a person being addressed rather than a generic observation about one's own experience. Without it, the reader will have to figure that out for himself - as well as whether the surprise is that the glass wasn't empty, or the hand was not
.
Non-practicing atheist

