09-05-2025, 08:21 PM
(09-05-2025, 05:22 AM)adagio Wrote: It reads well, yet I feel that this piece may be too long for the message it contains. Nothing is permanent, even our sun will go out – but the bees don't care, going about their daily business. That's what it says, right? I feel that some sort of conclusion is missing here. I'd really like to know where it leads, what your next thought is on that.Hi Adagio,
Thanks for reading and commenting. I agree. Like I mentioned, the ending wasn't what I originally intended. I will go back and try to rework it and hopefully address the issues you raise.
Thanks again,
Bryn