Surprised - edit2

[brynmawr1]

Surprised


You’re old, almost  like your line break here
as old as I am now–

Surely you’ve walked  maybe comma after surely?
into a second or third room
and wondered why
you came here–     are you here?  Reads more direct and has a hint of extended meaning, IMO.

then found a glass
part-full of wine
in your hand
that you’d thought was empty.

But there it is
and here you are,
my dear.

original version;

You’re old, almost
as old as I am now–

Surely you’ve walked
into a second or third room
and wondered why
you came here–

then found a glass
half full of wine
in your hand
that you’d though was empty.

But there it is
and here you are,
my dear.

Hi Duke,
I've been meaning to comment for awhile.  Not much to add except my comment above.  I would also consider cutting S4.  For me, the gut punch comes from the 'surprise' of finding your cup is not as empty as assumed.  I read the poem as a metaphor for the feeling that your life is over only to find out it isn't and letting the reader dangle with that.  
Hope this is useful,
Bryn