07-31-2025, 11:14 PM
Hello depressedmetalhead, I like this poem.
I think for me personally with these style of poems, there should be a 3rd final stanza that makes some statement or changes the readers view on something.
the first stanza is setup that introduces something in nature that feeds on something.
the second stand stanza brings up something in nature that rids us of something in nature that rids us of things that steal/feed on what is not theirs.
To me maybe the final stanza should either combine these two things or maybe they should interact in some way to make some final stance.
Just a thought, nice poem!
I think for me personally with these style of poems, there should be a 3rd final stanza that makes some statement or changes the readers view on something.
the first stanza is setup that introduces something in nature that feeds on something.
the second stand stanza brings up something in nature that rids us of something in nature that rids us of things that steal/feed on what is not theirs.
To me maybe the final stanza should either combine these two things or maybe they should interact in some way to make some final stance.
Just a thought, nice poem!