06-10-2025, 11:14 AM
Hey Bryn and RiverNotch,
Thanks for the feedback. You both gave me a lot to think about with this one. I kind of thought I was being too cute with the ending, so loving the feedback on that especially.
Thanks again,
Richard
I've done a 2nd draft for this one. The more I edited the yellowed love line, the more the entire poem changed from there. I might have gutted it too much, but time and feedback will tell.
Thanks for the feedback. You both gave me a lot to think about with this one. I kind of thought I was being too cute with the ending, so loving the feedback on that especially.
Thanks again,
Richard
I've done a 2nd draft for this one. The more I edited the yellowed love line, the more the entire poem changed from there. I might have gutted it too much, but time and feedback will tell.
Time is the best editor.