06-05-2025, 01:13 AM
The sound of an unseen train at night,
Repeating over stuttering tracks
Into dark distance.
I am glad to be standing still
Just outside my front door, feet firm to the familiar, listening.
The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition.
How courageous at this late hour.
First, I'd like to begin by saying I'm no critic. I like the poem a lot. Perhaps a bit too much "my" and "I" though not sure how you'd go about getting around it. Really like the line, "The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition." Feels like I'm there with you, experiencing it firsthand. Fantastic work, hope to read more in the future! Thanks for sharing!
Repeating over stuttering tracks
Into dark distance.
I am glad to be standing still
Just outside my front door, feet firm to the familiar, listening.
The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition.
How courageous at this late hour.
First, I'd like to begin by saying I'm no critic. I like the poem a lot. Perhaps a bit too much "my" and "I" though not sure how you'd go about getting around it. Really like the line, "The train howl shrinks and I envy its transition." Feels like I'm there with you, experiencing it firsthand. Fantastic work, hope to read more in the future! Thanks for sharing!