Wild Cherry
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yep with mine I try to go against Iambic as I feel with spoken English these days a lot actual language doesn't flow in 10 to 11 syllables but fluctuates a lot more. Ive written a few which do try to stick to Iambic pentameter but then have the occasional Trochee in as well, to spice things up. Thanks for looking over the poem and I can see what you mean about the various words which should be changed.

Its really great to get a critique I can build on so honestly, a heartfelt thanks.
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Wild Cherry - by DaveAshley - 05-18-2025, 12:51 AM
RE: Wild Cherry - by dukealien - 05-18-2025, 06:23 AM
RE: Wild Cherry - by DaveAshley - 05-18-2025, 06:53 PM
RE: Wild Cherry - by busker - 05-18-2025, 07:26 PM



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