Question Mark
#6
Perhaps:
"a squiggle and a dot" --> "a squiggle, a dot"

I like how it starts, although as the poem evolves it loses its meter and cohesion - this could be intentional.
Perhaps, add a line to signal a descent into chaos.

E.g.

Am I free?
Was I ever truly me?
Am I still
the person I wanted to kill?
My skin isn’t right,
every day is a fight

[My mind shatters!: / ]  --> or something otherwise dramatic
to find myself and understand
who I am and for what to stand
the struggle magnified by my elders who
force upon me what is and isn't true
but I am no sheep, I question
Unwilling to conceal or bend per every suggestion
I am a question mark, a squiggle and a dot
in a world which never gives a second thought

Also maybe add full stop at the end to complement the "give [no] second thought" idea.
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Messages In This Thread
Question Mark - by depressedmetalhead - 04-02-2025, 04:51 AM
RE: Question Mark - by poetry_zealot - 04-02-2025, 08:48 PM
RE: Question Mark - by Mark A Becker - 04-03-2025, 12:00 AM
RE: Question Mark - by rowens - 04-04-2025, 09:03 PM
RE: Question Mark - by carahmellow - 04-08-2025, 02:28 PM
RE: Question Mark - by Luchoracu - 04-09-2025, 03:27 AM
RE: Question Mark - by twowza - 05-05-2025, 12:08 AM



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