Saint Marilyn

[Magpie]

Interesting poem you got here, I'm not getting all the references. I've left a couple of thoughts below.

I
A babe begotten in June,
emerges with truth in her eyes—
refuses to take milk, to suck.
The nurses exchange glances, unnerved. - this last line seems awkward

A Sunday school sweetheart, - drop 'A' it reads better
china doll spinning vowels,
vowels spinning, soft as prayer, - not sure about the repetition of 'spinning vowels' even if it is reversed 
hallowed be the gentle refrain of  - is this a Catholic reference?
words, rivers, words again.
Fingers play at cotton sleeve, velvet ribbon.

A bride, poring over Joyce,
fingernail spirals on her thigh,
feels for Molly, for Anna Livia—
riverrun deeper than prayer.
a knot tightens round her heart,
a strand of hair, sharp, sticky—
grips, twists.               - again these last two lines seem awkward compared to the rest of the stanza

II
All-American girl, candylips,
O, how they drove to uproar
at the contour of your hips!

Beside me in the taxi, - questions about the narrators identity 
you see your lover in the moon,
Turn outward, cracked mirror—
a silvery disc in the breathfog glass.
You hug yourself, pull your coat tighter.

Last night you dreamt of
a snake coiled around an egg, - just to make it read better
a dislocated jaw—
a crunch, a pop,
the precious yolk devoured,
the promise of love undone. - excellent last stanza

Good poem, the second part is far superior especially that last stanza. This seems to be the heart of the poem. I feel like the first section could benefit from some slight trimming and tidying up a bit.

Cheers for the read