sewage drains

[Poet-dude-ig]

don't you all want to stop the vain?
be distant in all that remains?
run into narrow alleys
repopulate in sewage drains?
be silent in any danger that has stained?
crowd-surf tile tunnels in a redundant haze?
repeat the priors; no maps or guides are given in a maze
repent for liars; we all gave time to this craze so keep on dreaming

I love the varying forms of imagery you use throughout this poem. One thing that I think could make this poem that much better would be to unify the length of the lines, or to integrate a few more line-breaks than there currently is. I feel like the final 4 words: "So keep on dreaming" are kind of like a mic drop moment of vast importance, but the line-spacing kind of just throws it at the end of the line and lessens the impact of this finalizing line. Overall I love this poem; take my feedback with a grain of salt for I am a single perspective in a world of many.