03-05-2025, 07:42 AM
Well written
Needs some editing and rewriting in parts, but otherwise nice
“ He is discharged in a couple weeks but of course as fate would have it he doesnt make it long once hes out. Miles finds him dead in his armchair on a Thursday morning.”
I don’t think this is needed. The death is better off screen. It’s more interesting that way
Needs some editing and rewriting in parts, but otherwise nice
“ He is discharged in a couple weeks but of course as fate would have it he doesnt make it long once hes out. Miles finds him dead in his armchair on a Thursday morning.”
I don’t think this is needed. The death is better off screen. It’s more interesting that way