Four Women, v2

[RiverNotch]

thanks for the feedback

i wanted to keep the tone of the narration as clinical as before, but to also follow your advice of making it more than a list, of making it more poetic and brutal. hope this worked


p.s. on the origins of this thing, this was my NaPM entry for the 27th of April last year.

that version ended very differently, but i ended up disliking its didactism, just as i liked---i wanted to further develop---its general story.

thanks again