02-21-2025, 02:44 PM
(02-14-2025, 04:15 AM)midnightcowboy Wrote: don't you all just want to stop the vain?The last line, “line we all gave time to this craze”, which refers to the rest of the poem in the “craze” left me really thinking about the craze, it’s good. “Crowd surf tile-tunnels” is great and it makes me imagine new things, but I feel like “in a redundant haze” has less meaning, because “redundant” and “haze” are pretty vague or broad. Overall a great poem.
be distant in all that remains?
run into narrow alleys to repopulate in sewage drains?
be silent in any danger that has remained?
crowd-surf tile tunnels in a redundant haze?
repeat the priors; no maps or guides are given in a maze
repent for liars; we all gave time to this craze
