sewage drains

[midnightcowboy]

agreed with the end rhyming, I dont think there is much salvaging though,
might go back to the drawing board

Hello cowboy-
Almost every end-rhyme seems forced- most of the internal rhymes, too. That's as BASIC as i can be.
Re-think, review, and re-write, and you should be able to salvage this one. Needs more SHOW and less TELL.
... Mark