02-20-2025, 08:25 AM
Hello cowboy-
Almost every end-rhyme seems forced- most of the internal rhymes, too. That's as BASIC as i can be.
Re-think, review, and re-write, and you should be able to salvage this one. Needs more SHOW and less TELL.
... Mark
Almost every end-rhyme seems forced- most of the internal rhymes, too. That's as BASIC as i can be.
Re-think, review, and re-write, and you should be able to salvage this one. Needs more SHOW and less TELL.
... Mark