NEWBIE looking for tips

[carahmellow]

Tree of Life

For what if, in a past life I were a tree

Standing in nature, so tall and so free (wondering if this line is important... it doesn't say much, and feels as though its only their for rhyme.)

Facing each season alive and anew

You'll say to yourself how much I've grew (this should technically be grown... Grown is used with words like "has" "had" or "have")

With each spring comes the Bloom

For every leave I make room (not sure if this is supposed to be Leaf... the plural would be leaves. but leave isnt a noun)

Eager to know

To learn and to grow

For each of these leaves are precious to me

For without these leaves I am not a tree (maybe you could come up with a new way of saying leaves... foliage, greenery... leaves again feels repetative, especially because you use it again later in the poem as well.)

And together we face the season to come

These leaves are my friends we're unified as one.

And Yes they may wither and fall

But a lesson has been learnt from each one and all (rhyme feels a little bit forced... because it could technically end on "one" but "and all" is added just for rhymes sake)

For trees provide energy, oxygen and air

Extending each of its branches sheltering us with care

Yet all that you see is my branches and trunk

But deep below the earth is where my roots have been sunk

For what you see is merely a tree

but deep inside there lives me. (This is worded a bit oddly. I think it's the word "there"... because you are talking about an object, "there" doesn't feel like the right word choice... I would suggest working this line a bit more... make it impactful since its the closing line. Word play a bit more. If you really want that rhyme, change up the line before first.)

Good job! I only did some basic critique for now... but i encourage you to keep writing... excited to read more of your work!