02-09-2025, 02:58 AM
Thank you all for your comments. I am going to play around with the working backward idea.... I think I'm going to really re-work this one because I like the idea, I just wasn't happy with it, and you gave me great suggestions.
I also think this might benefit from being less rhymy. Sometimes, I go for that style right off the bat, and it doesn't work as well as it does in other poems. This is one of them.... I forced it.
I also think this might benefit from being less rhymy. Sometimes, I go for that style right off the bat, and it doesn't work as well as it does in other poems. This is one of them.... I forced it.