Domesticity

[brynmawr1]

I'm working on this one.. and it's not coming together as smoothly as I would like. Any basic critiques anyone has would be helpful. I want it to be a bit more conversational... not too flowery in it's prose... I think the theme works better that way. but it feels like it's lacking something. Also... title? 

Domesticity

I worked hard today   You can also rearrange to have more impact, eg 'Today I worked hard' ending with a stronger word leaving the reader with the real intent of the line, IMO.  Even going further by introducing the idea of not just today but every day.  Again, eg 'Today I worked hard/ every day a women alone/...'
as a woman at home.
Laundry and dishes,
all alone.
Dinner is prepped,
dentists are called,
wood floors mopped,
garbages hauled.

I relaxed for a moment,
took a light rest;
I work past five,
as the steward of our nest.
But when your car
rolls into the drive,
I jump to my feet,
into chores I dive.

Even though you assure me
and know how I move,
self-doubt makes me feel
like I have something to prove.
I need sound to come
from my lone falling tree,
gratitude is validated 
when being perceived.

Hi CM,

My 2 cents.  To my read, the rhyming is working against the flow, however skillfully it is done.  The problem, IMO, is that at each rhyme is a natural pause and it makes it a little predictable and stiff.  Maybe try lengthening the lines and let any rhymes fall internal and then think about how you can use the line breaks to add meaning or texture.  In particular, I think the last stanza suffers from trying to keep the rhyme going and it gets muddled.  I like Duke's suggestion on getting this stanza solid and then work back from there.  Hope this helps.
I enjoy your writing.
Bryn