Weeds and Wild Flowers (edit and new Title)

[brynmawr1]

Clarity in the Metaphor, while the metaphor of the garden is compelling, some lines blur its intended meaning. For instance, "allowed to fester among the greater good; free to steal sunlight" introduces a moral ambiguity that might benefit from refinement. Is the focus on the weeds' rebellion or the gardener's struggle to define worth?

Certain sections feel slightly overextended, such as "keenly I analyze each developing pattern of leaf, stalk and form to determine its future worth." Trimming could heighten the impact and prevent the rhythm from dragging.The poem builds tension beautifully but leaves the reader in a perpetual state of anticipation. 

Consider adding a moment of resolution or insight to give the exploration more narrative or emotional closure.While abstraction enriches the poem's philosophical undertones, it occasionally overshadows the tangible imagery. More tactile details, like the scent of the soil or the texture of the leaves, could anchor the reader further.

Hi Grady,
Welcome to the Pen!  Thanks for your insightful comments.  I had almost forgotten about this one.  Your suggestions have sparked new interest and have given me some specific areas to focus on.
Take care,
Bryn