12-19-2024, 06:12 AM
Hey other Mark-
I like how the meaning of the title is revealed by last line. I also appreciate the 'd'-litteration in the last three lines- it reinforces the word 'deadly' quite nicely. Such a whimsical seeming poem, with an unexpected blte at the end. Nature is a paradox. Good job.
I like how the meaning of the title is revealed by last line. I also appreciate the 'd'-litteration in the last three lines- it reinforces the word 'deadly' quite nicely. Such a whimsical seeming poem, with an unexpected blte at the end. Nature is a paradox. Good job.
Magpie Wrote:Paradoxps- While I appreciate the twirling NEWCASTLE in your moniker, I think they're stuck in the middle. Again. Can't choose yer 'children' I suppose. At least Man City will sink this year. I'm just glad that Premiere League is available in the US.
A beautiful sight
spread across the grass
beneath tangled oaks
in early morning sun.
With gentle breezes
iridescence sparkles
in dew drops caught
on deadly gossamer.