12-16-2024, 06:52 PM
Hi, this poem seems more like a thought that gets repeated. The first three lines are a fair opening, they set the scene that the narrator wishes to die in the sea. But that just gets reinforced throughout the rest of the poem. The reader needs more to grasp hold of here, I have lots of questions and no answers. It's hard to empathise with a narrator that has said nothing about themselves except that they want to die.
Sorry if this seems harsh
Sorry if this seems harsh
(12-16-2024, 11:23 AM)Pebbel~Lady Wrote: Sea swallow me,Take it from here and expand
drag me under
your cold ferocious waves. and cold. - 'ferocious' is a good word choice it sounds like a wild sea
wae aye man ye radgie
