Run Right Back To Me

[spencedude75]

OK. I really like the vision here. I just think it needs more precision in both language and form (most specifically the rhyme). To begin with the rhyming, it feels a bit forces, especially because there is no consistent rhyme scheme across the whole poem.  Some of the lines are very nice (esp. as someone else pointed out, the brief usage of iambic pentameter) As far as language goes, maybe try and avoid some cliche ("I can't count how many times" "I'm still going through withdrawal from you") and just some more general precision. 
Nice start, though!