Run Right Back To Me

[carahmellow]

Run Right Back To Me

I can’t count how many times we cried together.
I really thought you’d stay with me forever.
“I have no sense of self when I look at you”.
Now I get to say these words to someone new.

God knows how much I loved your laugh,
I don’t have a clue how you hated it. I dont like how you jumped from past to present tense in this stanza. This line is also a little off. 
I loved you so much, I loved you on your behalf.
I guess I just didn’t know when to quit.

I prayed to God to make you right for me.
I’m sure the angels can sympathize,
Though you don’t seem to be as holy.
Heaven is witness to how I agonize.
I never thought I’d be this lonely.

I’m still going through withdrawal from you.
A healthy mind can be corrupted.
Your lips were poison imbued.
I’d kill to hug you undisrupted.

We swore we’d never leave each other.
Instead, life chose that I’d suffer. - I think this needs to be "I would" for flow... 
The fatal memory of your kiss;
I had never experienced such bliss. 

The sweetest voice once exclaimed
“You have such cute dimples”.
An innocent voice once pained
“You can’t do this to me” in between whimpers,
As I write this poem about how I still miss her, - you have been speaking in second person through the whole poem.. this line in third is a bit jarring and throws it off. Maybe change "her" to "you".
She’s probably guzzling down bottles of liquor. - same with this one as well.... "her" to "you"

Sometimes all I think about is you,
Late nights in the middle of June. - great line
Crying out “Don’t leave me so soon”,
How could I ever get through?

And when you runaway,
I need you to run right back to me.
Run right back to me,
I need you to run right back to me,
More specifically, C.

This is a great poem... I could really tell how you were feeling writing it, and it was really easy to understand, but i think its a little wordy. Try being a bit more intentional with each word you are choosing... I used to struggle with this a lot as well.  right now it sounds a bit amateur. I think this would be great as spoken word, but the flow feels a really off as a reader... Almost like, I'm trying to make it rhyme and flow... but it's just not hitting naturally which is causing it to feel clumsy. I think just trimming it up a little bit would be great, you have a great thing going so far!