Run Right Back To Me

[Wjames]

Run Right Back To Me

I can’t count how many times we cried together.
I really thought you’d stay with me forever.
“I have no sense of self when I look at you”.
Now I get to say these words to someone new.

God knows how much I loved your laugh, I like the rhythm of this line. It's written in iambic meter: god KNOWS how MUCH i LOVED your LAUGH - alternating unstressed and stressed syllables. It rolls along and is pleasant to read aloud (and aloud in your head). I think it's very difficult to write rhyming poetry effectively without using a steady meter to sort of lend weight to the rhymes - makes them fit in and feel natural and less forced.
I don’t have a clue how you hated it.
I loved you so much, I loved you on your behalf. I like the idea of loving someone on their own behalf and the rhyme with laugh is nice. I think as above, the rhyme would feel more natural if it matched the meter of the line it rhymes with - I.e: i LOVED you ON your OWN beHALF. Adding own keeps the iambic syllable pattern with the line it rhymes with - makes it feel more natural, at least to my ear.
I guess I just didn’t know when to quit.

I prayed to God to make you right for me.
I’m sure the angels can sympathize,
Though you don’t seem to be as holy.
Heaven is witness to how I agonize.
I never thought I’d be this lonely.

I’m still going through withdrawal from you.
A healthy mind can be corrupted.
Your lips were poison imbued.
I’d kill to hug you undisrupted.

We swore we’d never leave each other.
Instead, life chose that I’d suffer.
The fatal memory of your kiss;
I had never experienced such bliss.

The sweetest voice once exclaimed
“You have such cute dimples”.
An innocent voice once pained 
“You can’t do this to me” in between whimpers,
As I write this poem about how I still miss her,
She’s probably guzzling down bottles of liquor.

Sometimes all I think about is you,
Late nights in the middle of June. 
Crying out “Don’t leave me so soon”,
How could I ever get through?

And when you runaway,
I need you to run right back to me.
Run right back to me,
I need you to run right back to me,
More specifically, C.

Hey Bananaman, the main thought I had when reading the poem is that it felt a little too dependant on rhyming that feels forced. Rhymes should be a pleasant surprise and feel natural - in a good song, the rhymes hit at the right spot in the natural progression of a melody and beat. 

I think in poetry, meter is the melody and beat equivalent, and it can be used to make rhymes feel less shoe horned in. Rhyming can be used effectively without meter, but I can't explain why it sometimes does.

I like the sentiment but I don't think the rhyming is enhancing what you are trying to say.