Flowers

[carahmellow]

Some heartache, sadness, sleeplessness and an attempt to feel a loved one's grief bore this.  I haven't written poetry since grade school and wrote 5 poems this week. 
Thanks in advance for any critique or just a general reaction. Be honest, I'm not attached to this so don't worry about hurting my feelings, just wanted to see what others thought.


This winter will end
They always do

The cold evening frosts
Make way to morning dew

The endless dark days
Grow back into warm

The grey black abyss
Yields a first springs storm

Some patches of ice
May never go away

But the melting of snow
Will sprout flowers one day

When i first read this, I thought wow, this is such a perfect poem to encapsulate the transition of seasons.. but It feels a little bit cliche. Then I read the first part and realized it was supposed to be about grief. Which is great actually, I do like that metephor, but I think it might work even better if you were able to tie grief into it somehow so the reader understands the intent. Sometimes just adding a title can help.