10-04-2024, 03:50 PM
Bunx, you are a bassplayer, your sonics work that way.
You are, what the experts call schizo-affective,
this feels like empathy, to you.
And it is.
"I want to be light with this poem, since I feel it is personal.
One thing I think I would change is the listing in some areas. It gets to be redundant."
Semi-whatever-hisnameis has a rhythm here.
"She will never leave the box she helps maintain.
She will never know compassion, his hate
her fate."
I think that rhythms come natural to people with patterned minds.
Read Milton and Hart Crane together. Read them, listen to dorks reading them--online, if you can. And write in those rhythms.
Therepofre/???/Theo Roethke made the comment along the context of: Try to write like your favorite poets, you will fail, and that failure will be your originality.
Do you want to be original, though? Or express something that you want to be already known?
I gave up trying to be understood. And people telling me that I'm just trying to be different got redundant after a while.
When his hand strikes her face, she breaks down
and tells me.
I was drunk out of my mind when I posted this comment.
I am out of booze now, and sober.
I agree with everything I said.
You are, what the experts call schizo-affective,
this feels like empathy, to you.
And it is.
"I want to be light with this poem, since I feel it is personal.
One thing I think I would change is the listing in some areas. It gets to be redundant."
Semi-whatever-hisnameis has a rhythm here.
"She will never leave the box she helps maintain.
She will never know compassion, his hate
her fate."
I think that rhythms come natural to people with patterned minds.
Read Milton and Hart Crane together. Read them, listen to dorks reading them--online, if you can. And write in those rhythms.
Therepofre/???/Theo Roethke made the comment along the context of: Try to write like your favorite poets, you will fail, and that failure will be your originality.
Do you want to be original, though? Or express something that you want to be already known?
I gave up trying to be understood. And people telling me that I'm just trying to be different got redundant after a while.
When his hand strikes her face, she breaks down
and tells me.
I was drunk out of my mind when I posted this comment.
I am out of booze now, and sober.
I agree with everything I said.