09-20-2024, 01:08 PM
two notes
why is "Garden" capitalised?
that hyphen looks lonely...either do a quick -- or just go —
now, a question
i really like this piece, and it has the general feel of an haiku, but i have to wonder which word is supposed to be the seasonal word. do cats in your part of the world tend to be more active during only a certain time of the year, or is it rather the mice, or what? i mean, it probably doesn't matter....but, unless it's *already* a haiku, it's so close! so close!
why is "Garden" capitalised?
that hyphen looks lonely...either do a quick -- or just go —
now, a question
i really like this piece, and it has the general feel of an haiku, but i have to wonder which word is supposed to be the seasonal word. do cats in your part of the world tend to be more active during only a certain time of the year, or is it rather the mice, or what? i mean, it probably doesn't matter....but, unless it's *already* a haiku, it's so close! so close!