Sharing the Last Mandarin(edit 2)

[busker]

The Mandarin

Squat and plump, inviting …. A good choice of words… onomatopoeic 
skin orange so pliant, …removing ‘in the bowl’ has helped tighten it up 
so easily undressed- … great line 
tip of thumb working
the cleft of skin and flesh
where scent becomes sweetness ..: much better than ‘citrus’
a wash across the tongue; coverings
left forgotten. How delicious it is … I love ‘coverings left forgotten’ as it is a link back to the ‘undressed’ and completes the poem.
wanting another. … the end is a bit banal. A comma might introduce ambiguity and cleverness, but not a lot of it  
 

Squat and plump, inviting
in the bowl.
Orange skin, pliant;
so easily undressed-
tip of thumb working
the cleft
of skin and flesh, the scent
of citrus; a wash
of cool sweetness across
the tongue.
How delicious it is
to be perfectly made
for consumption.

It’s almost perfect.
The ending is a bit weak. It is a delicious expectation, or it is delicious, and the narrator wants one more, is an ambiguity that a comma can introduce. But it feels anticlimactic. There is no clever observation on the human condition, or a wise morality tale. Or just something extremely clever.

That’s my only gripe. Quite perfect otherwise.