Audience Hesitation - edit 3, title change 2
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Story Hesitation


You want to know before
the movie starts,
the novel draws you in,
not as a spoiler, YouTube™ clip
or liner note
(that would be cheating)–

nor need you foreknow
if there will be shooting,
flames, defeat, romantic interludes,
partings and reunions,
degradation, even loss of limbs:

no, what you need to know
(what all consumers want to know
before we grow attached)
is if they leave as lovers.



Many thanks to all the critics.  I've tried to address each suggestion, including a title change.  This may not be the final title.

The reason for singular "reunion" in earlier versions was rather juvenile:  I didn't want to end the line with an "s" when the following line began with one ("stress").    Removing "stress" eliminates the need to switch back and forth between plurals and a collective noun (though "degradation" is that).
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RE: Buyer Indecision - by Bunx - 09-08-2024, 07:13 AM
RE: Buyer Indecision - edit - by dukealien - 09-14-2024, 04:55 AM
RE: Buyer Indecision - edit - by brynmawr1 - 09-14-2024, 05:19 AM
RE: Buyer Indecision - edit - by Knot - 09-14-2024, 10:16 PM
RE: Buyer Indecision - edit - by Valerie Please - 09-15-2024, 06:10 AM
RE: Story Hesitation - edit 2, title change - by dukealien - 09-15-2024, 07:50 AM



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