Audience Hesitation - edit 3, title change 2
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Buyer Indecision


You want to know before
the movie starts,
the novel takes you in,
not as a spoiler, YouTube™ clip
or liner note
(that would be cheating)–

not if there will be shooting,
detonations and romantic interests,
partings and reunion,
stress, degradation, maybe loss of limbs:

no, what you want to know
(what all consumers want to know
before we get stuck in)
is if they leave as lovers.



Thanx, @Bunx, for the good critique.  I tried several ways to apply the consumer idea and replacing "you," but wound up with this minimal change.

The attempts to replace "you" all led to confusions between "they" the consumers and "they" the implied characters in the inner story.  So I ended up trying to  exploit the ambiguity.
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Messages In This Thread
RE: Buyer Indecision - by Bunx - 09-08-2024, 07:13 AM
RE: Buyer Indecision - edit - by dukealien - 09-14-2024, 04:55 AM
RE: Buyer Indecision - edit - by brynmawr1 - 09-14-2024, 05:19 AM
RE: Buyer Indecision - edit - by Knot - 09-14-2024, 10:16 PM
RE: Buyer Indecision - edit - by Valerie Please - 09-15-2024, 06:10 AM



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