Sharing the Last Mandarin(edit 2)

[Knot]

Hi Bryn,
I like the idea but it falls a little flat, for me. The way things are spelled out in the final three lines leaves the reader nothing to do. And that a citrus fruit should smell of citrus is no revelation. What would happen if you started from here

so easily undressed-
tip of thumb working
the cleft of skin and flesh
where scent is a sweetness
on the tongue

and kept going?


Best, Knot


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