09-09-2024, 09:19 PM
Hi Tiger.
Just to say, I agree with Valerie about context (and also about 'player' in S1 - I chickened out of mentioning that.) Given how divorced a lot of people are from farming/food production who's going to recognise this? If you're going to revisit I think you need to take your audience into account (and with you on the journey.)
Wondered why one of the pigs is female, wouldn't they be kept for breeding?
You call it 'A Tale of' but this is just reworking the version you cite, so isn't it 'The Tale of'?
Still think you need to rhyme, or strongly meter.
Best, Knot
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Just to say, I agree with Valerie about context (and also about 'player' in S1 - I chickened out of mentioning that.) Given how divorced a lot of people are from farming/food production who's going to recognise this? If you're going to revisit I think you need to take your audience into account (and with you on the journey.)
Wondered why one of the pigs is female, wouldn't they be kept for breeding?
You call it 'A Tale of' but this is just reworking the version you cite, so isn't it 'The Tale of'?
Still think you need to rhyme, or strongly meter.
Best, Knot
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