After the Sertraline

[RiverNotch]

i don't know what the general lack of punctuation is supposed to do, especially when it ends with a period

might be better to go "when once..." or just cut that first pronoun altogether, though i don't think a one word line would work here -- maybe just do couplets

once you were an unsplit atom
snug in some cubbyhole

where the rent was low...

After the Sertraline

where once 
you were an unsplit atom

snug in some cubbyhole
where the rent was low 
and no one said boo 

now you're a bloody big bang 
at the door

and I can't say 
I wasn't expecting you.

recently i had a week where i ran out of sertraline. i basically got vertigo. it wasn't fun.