Beyond Critique

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I did respond to your intensive but it was deleted as well

Glad to see you're really trying to own it

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My Girl’s Bosoms My Ankle Swingers the long title is an over used and abused cliche found mostly in millennial emo pop rock
LLJ at some point I ask myself if the poem must be deciphered or if I can just enjoy it for what it is.  Your choice on letters here takes me first to LL Cool J or an acronym for a business, i don't want to come to any rush judgements 
Sjjasdjhfbkjhdsfsd followed immediately by one long jumble, the only other acceptable line here I believe would have been a space followed by another string of all caps
Sdfkjshfs i feel like your rushing here, trying to get the letters down
Dsfksdjhgds i like the subtle change here. A different starting letter really moves the matter
Bbbbbfhjsbdfshbsbsbbsh up until this point I have been satisfied to contemplate the lettering, but here I immediately want to pronounce it outlook and I don't think it works here, I don't like the sudden change 
b and this is blatant over compensation
lkjd
fsfjdshfbweiubsdvkbx
vmjbsdfsbvsdxlkjdlkjsdfsthis line is your saving grace
 
dlfkgjdf
k i think 'k' as a line would be too representative of legitimate wording and dialogue, other than the use of seemingly random lettering i feel like you're not taking the proper time to organize them incoherently
 
 
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lk okay you're trying to combine some things here
 
d this is the defining moment here. This brings us full swing from the ankles back up to the bosoms.

I'm pretty sure this is a social experiment where you're studying people's responses, asking for an intensive critique of what was previously miscellaneous, but often times the author is not the narrator so I Reay just can't wait to see what you do with this

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I think it will be funny when you leave the site ultimately because I'm the only one paying you attention

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