crying uncle

[brynmawr1]

currency

You say, “I love you.” I value that
as purely transactional.

Your calculation of love is based
solely upon your bottom line.

You sold the bond between us
for pennies on the dollar,

and I no longer find currency
in your counterfeit idea of family.

Hey Mark,
I admire your ability to carry the metaphor throughout the piece.  But you rely a lot on cliche to keep it going after the first couplet.  Which can be fine but it makes an otherwise poignant piece a little kitchy.  It might be better served by abandoning form and letting the content dictate more.
take care,
bryn