A Still Life (new title)

[brynmawr1]

Well hello Steve from Brynmar!  Good to read you again. Some in-line comments below:

Anonymity of Days  not the right title, I'm afraid

Quarrelling calls of seagulls and kin;  perhaps plural 'calls'- catches a better internal rhyme with 'seagulls', and a semi-colon  instead of a period
the smell of coconut oil and aloe on skin. aloed as a verb ?  perhaps add 'oil' ?? add 'the' to begin the line, to tie in the previous line. ??

Wind blown
sand in towels and on clothes  added 'on' for rthymn
yet soft under foot-
a massage between toes. 'wind blowing' almost refers to what's under foot (not the sand)

My sea of troubles lulled  make it personal
by the whisper of turning pages;  I really, really like this line!
each wave a murmured crescendo;  personifying waves not working for me- draws attention away from the people
a beach chair inviting repose. ditto for 'chair's' .  'insistent' not working for me

Frizzbees, puzzles, cold fuzzy navels- Maybe 'frizzbees' instead of generic 'games'. Maybe 'fuzzy navels' instead of generic 'wine' ??
our family time measured  make it personal with 'our' ??
by umbrella shadows.  no personification for 'umbrella' while you're at it.  'shadows' me thinks, as they change as time passes.

Please take my additions as suggestions- I don't intend for you to implement them, but wanted to also avoid protacted, oblique comments.
All in all a lovely, innocuous poem- no drama needed- it creates a relaxed feel.
~ Mark

Hey Mark,
Good to read you too!
The title was initially "Beach Life" but then I had a hanging line that was supposed to be the ending that I switched out.  Trying to get across that vacation vibe where one loses track of what day it is.

I had a question about the personification issue.  I hadn't really thought of the possessive doing that.  At least any more than 'murmured' or 'insistent', no?

I used 'insistent' to convey a certain futility in resisting.  Working on a better replacement.

As always, thanks for commenting.
Take care,
steve