The Dragon’s Dog — The Drake

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The Dragon’s Dog:
The Drake

The dragon learned to lamp bodies black,
to raisin blood in arteries, to make fire … do you need the third  “to” ?
burn the stink from skulls through popped-out eyes. … great line 
Turn churches red. Mink children hot with ash. … snothrr great line 
Inhaling, quiet, the devil heard a crash
where plates from a dining room where rubble, sliding
toward a pit stalled, and a puppy’s eyes … all the extra detail about the plates is a  distraction IMO
beheld the drake. And she standed on her back … nice expression 

legs and shook a little as she cried.
He tried to fly away all night. But the puppy.
He burned his favorite cities down, but the puppy 
just kept crying, oooooo, and he sang back, ooooooo.
And she was so cute. He fed her and lied
about the world, about cruelty.  … beautiful and unexpected 

The poem is full of interesting turns of phrase and original expressions. Even the invented words work
The story holds interest till the end and the conclusion has a satisfying payoff 
A good one