Concrete

[Ikki777]

Welcome to the site, IK. Well done responding to CRNDLSM's advice so thank you for your input on those threads.
I will try to get you started with some of my thinking below. It's fine to take or leave any feedback you receive here. My unsolicited advice is not to rush into an edit. A good poem oftentimes needs steeping. 

Ear bent to a black hole
Whirring depthlessness I feel like tho "depthlessness" is the correct word, it's not easy on the tongue
Explorations of heaven 
Reveries on the nature of light consider CAPS on "Nature" and "Light" for effect

Temporal ripples 
Glimmer through the concrete you can do better than "glimmer" here
Oceanic fabric
Gates arise nope. gates open, gates close, gates get left ajar, - "arise" is distracting



All one ought to do is ask

Thanks for the feedback!

Glisten would be a lot nicer than glimmer.
Meant to put a comma at;
Oceanic fabric ,
Gates arise
So to have gates arising from the oceanic fabric, not sure how to connect or imply this better? I do prefer gates I think to say doorways or thresholds especially with the g

I really like depthlessness here, gonna have a think