Fogwood [edit3]

[Ikki777]

Fogwood


March Carolina dogwoods
float popcorn-blossomed
between dew-grassed earth
and misty sailcloth sky

as if trees were fountaining
whiteful joy from slender trunks
through boughs and branches deep
into breath-held overlay

or bashful Sun cascaded
flowers down each laden stem
freshly nourishing
this ancient newborn world.

edit2;

March Carolina dogwoods
float popcorn-blossomed
between dew-grassed earth
and vague sailcloth sky

as if trees were fountaining
whiteful joy from upright trunks
through boughs and branches deep into
a breath-held overlay

or bashful Sun cascaded
flowers down each laden stem
radiantly nourishing
this ancient newborn world.

edit1;

March Carolina dogwoods
popcorn-blossomed float between
dew-grassed sighing earth
and foggy sailcloth sky.

It’s as if trees were spraying
whiteful joy from upright trunks
through boughs and branches deep into
a breath-held overlay

or bashful Sun cascaded flowers
into each laden swelling stem
brightly nursing, nourishing
this ancient newborn world.

original version;

March Carolina dogwoods
popcorn-blossomed spew between
dew-grassed lemon-crocused earth
and foggy sailcloth sky.

It’s as if trees were spraying
whiteful joy from upright trunks
through boughs and branches deep into
a breath-held overlay

or bashful Sun cascading flowers
into each laden swelling stem
brightly nursing, nourishing
this ancient newborn world.

I really like this. Really feel the bursting of spring contrasted with understated fog and almost tiredness. The youth and age goes really nice, bursting of spring life with understated fog. Sailcloth sky personal highlight