06-12-2024, 03:39 AM
Thanks for the read and observations, guys.
@Miley. I am rethinking that last line. Too often I try to get one last word in when I should stay mum.
@WJ. Ya, that first strophe needs reworking away from the idiom. It's funny because I didn't really have that cliche in mind at the time. "Bull" was always part of line 1 but "china shop" found its way in by a complete brain fart. The China shop has to go - thx for pointing it out.
Paul
@Miley. I am rethinking that last line. Too often I try to get one last word in when I should stay mum.
@WJ. Ya, that first strophe needs reworking away from the idiom. It's funny because I didn't really have that cliche in mind at the time. "Bull" was always part of line 1 but "china shop" found its way in by a complete brain fart. The China shop has to go - thx for pointing it out.
Paul