06-09-2024, 02:13 PM
(06-09-2024, 01:41 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: If I Knew Then...This reads as a regret poem, as in, we only regret the chances we don't take/so don't play it safe. Its also seems to play more on the carnal side of love...
I'd have been bull lubricious
rather than china shop cautious Funny opening, especially the first line, with its sonics.
I'd have clad my little cat feet Again, a funny image and gets across the shyness of a cat
in fourteen-hole Docs Took me a few reads and a google search to realize this meant doc martin boots (i think?)
and trucked in like a rhino bull/cat/rhino
I'd have been the bad boy
sucking your tongue
just to recount it to the boys Again, made me laugh
I'd have ripped the stuffing
from the Teddy Bear Assuming the N is the teddy bear maybe this reads better replacing "the" w/ "this"? Not sure..
and exposed myself honestly
Is Now really too late? Idk I think I can do w/o this last line, I guess it adds a little ambiguity, either its not too late and its an optimistic ending, or it is too late :-( But for me it just reads flatter then the previous stanza, which could make a fine ending
My first thought for the title was If I knew Then... that you were also into me. But it could be many things, like idk, if I knew Then how lonely i'd be now, or what its like to grow older, or that you would go for some other person, or that you were sick, or I would get sick.
I have had this feeling many times lol
thanks for sharing

