Cold heart (song lyrics)

[busker]

This reminds me of 30s soft jazz era, in how simple the lyrics present, covered by prairie family folk bands.  But the lyrics are also fairly Lou Reed like 'perfect day/ here she comes now' 
O you were mine
I think would sound better
When you were mine

And ain't good at the end is kinda cheap, 'isn't good' while cheating the syllables kinda adds a flair

I wonder if you started writing this with literally 'a long long time ago' or if that came later.  I'm not sold on it but the enjambment is cute.

Thanks for sharing, would you care if I added unauthorized music?

I’ve had this in my head for years, but only the tune. Not most of the lyrics.
It used to go “da dum da da” etc with  “don’t be such a cold heart” the only line with words.

When I sat down to write it now, i just thought up the words that fit the metre of the da-dum in my head

I’ll post the tune some day, or maybe not

Sure, feel free to add your own tune to it

I was curious as to how lyric sans music can be critted, and your post gives me some perspective