05-31-2024, 03:53 AM
Thank you for clarifying, it is a lot more interesting now
(05-23-2024, 04:18 AM)crow Wrote: The Spider Butter Flies I didn't know what to Google, spider butterflies don't seem to be a real thing, is spider butter a thing? The title definitely throws me off, maybe something besides spider?
When you bite yourself, what will you be?
The urge to “slice and taste the fat of me”
has been debated since there were debates.
Some died young and others in old age; because the goop is a death to rebirth
Some returned all gold and some were lazy. Gold and lazy don't contrast enough for me
Centuries of governments where monarchies
failed, led to a pattern of golden ages how about 'stages'
where the dyed and eyeless secrecy this whole sentence is confusing actually, is this sentence supposed to represent the ouroborous in some way?
was unveiled. We all need to eat
our guts and then like prey return this is a cool image to biologic pools
to formless biologic pools. To taste
ourselves, to die in rapture, to obtain
the consequence of urgency the state
that whips our naked flanks to purgatory: purgatory throws me off, I can see how it's related but initially am taken other places
death, rebirth, bitter, fatty, sweet.
As much was written on their angels’ feet.
I like this last line but written and angels and feet don't seem to go together.
I like the sounds and the idea, but do get confused while reading
This is part of my never-ending quest to endorse the English spondee and to write pretty, weird sci-fi sonnets.
Peanut butter honey banana sandwiches

