05-21-2024, 05:49 AM
I want to thank all of you (semi, bryn, tranq) for your critiques and your comments. Thanks for taking the time to read and exam my poem.
I apologize for taking so long to respond.
I have been inspired by your thoughts to do a deeper dive into my poem ... why I chose the words that I did ... their meanings ... their sounds ... their order? And doing this requires that I do, as well, a deeper dive into poetry as an art form (style, techniques, devices, etc.)
I never dreamed that I would develop an interest in poetry on this level. Yet I have, to my great surprise. Generally, I write in what I would call creative bursts. These bursts usually emerge from my ponderings on something deeply (sometimes for days, or longer), but often (though not always) without any intention of writing a poem or anything at all. They can simply be mechanisms that my unconscious uses to teach or inform or clarify an idea or experience to me. Additionally, my editing primarily comes from reading them aloud over and over again seeking rhythm and flow. Do the words sound right to my ears ... do the words, particularly the transition from one word to the next, feel right in my mouth (lips, tongue) as I pronounce them.
My poems are primarily intended to be read aloud. Each has, so far, become a part of my walking meditations. As such, I memorize them and they become imprinted in me. I have altered or added to some of them years later after having recited them hundreds and hundreds of times. A new line or a better word or phrase will suddenly burst forth seemingly out of nowhere.
I'm not sure to what degree, if any, I will alter this poem. But I am grateful for your input. My deep dive is not due to a need to "defend" my poem, rather it represents a desire for it to say what I want to say as best I can with my style (which is evolving of course).
I do know that my poem needs a new title. I have one in mind, but will save it for a follow-up.
Blessings
I apologize for taking so long to respond.
I have been inspired by your thoughts to do a deeper dive into my poem ... why I chose the words that I did ... their meanings ... their sounds ... their order? And doing this requires that I do, as well, a deeper dive into poetry as an art form (style, techniques, devices, etc.)
I never dreamed that I would develop an interest in poetry on this level. Yet I have, to my great surprise. Generally, I write in what I would call creative bursts. These bursts usually emerge from my ponderings on something deeply (sometimes for days, or longer), but often (though not always) without any intention of writing a poem or anything at all. They can simply be mechanisms that my unconscious uses to teach or inform or clarify an idea or experience to me. Additionally, my editing primarily comes from reading them aloud over and over again seeking rhythm and flow. Do the words sound right to my ears ... do the words, particularly the transition from one word to the next, feel right in my mouth (lips, tongue) as I pronounce them.
My poems are primarily intended to be read aloud. Each has, so far, become a part of my walking meditations. As such, I memorize them and they become imprinted in me. I have altered or added to some of them years later after having recited them hundreds and hundreds of times. A new line or a better word or phrase will suddenly burst forth seemingly out of nowhere.
I'm not sure to what degree, if any, I will alter this poem. But I am grateful for your input. My deep dive is not due to a need to "defend" my poem, rather it represents a desire for it to say what I want to say as best I can with my style (which is evolving of course).
I do know that my poem needs a new title. I have one in mind, but will save it for a follow-up.
Blessings