"Letter to Natalie" (Self-Harm, Suicide, Language)

[CRNDLSM]

Separating the art from the artist: the dark and depressing themes aren't enhanced by the rhymes and slant rhymes. Like an adult writing like a kid.  The rhymes could be okay if the meter flowed better.  I'm also of the school that less is more and you could probably cut a whole stanza without losing anything.  I'm not a fan of the violence, it gives me serial killer/shopping mall shooter vibes and I don't empathize.  Finally I was confused how both your bodies wash up on shore if you only drowned yourself.   

Take care