Awake
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Thanks a bunch Knot! I gave the poem a good look, and decided to make some radical changes. I think it portrays what I was alluding to much better now.

It's funny how much a large poem shrinks down after critique.

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I am going to tinker around with the ending for a bit.
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Messages In This Thread
Awake - by Semicircle - 05-13-2024, 04:11 AM
RE: Awake - by Tiger the Lion - 05-13-2024, 07:15 AM
RE: Awake - by busker - 05-13-2024, 12:04 PM
RE: Awake - by TranquillityBase - 05-14-2024, 02:16 AM
RE: Awake - by Semicircle - 05-14-2024, 11:49 AM
RE: Awake - by Mark A Becker - 05-16-2024, 12:49 AM
RE: Awake - by Semicircle - 05-16-2024, 04:26 AM
RE: Awake - by Knot - 05-17-2024, 01:14 AM
RE: Awake (New title: In Stasis) - by Semicircle - 05-17-2024, 04:24 AM
RE: Awake (New title: In Stasis) - by Knot - 05-17-2024, 11:51 PM
RE: Awake - by Semicircle - 05-20-2024, 12:51 AM
RE: Awake - by busker - 05-22-2024, 01:50 PM
RE: Awake - by Pjames - 05-25-2024, 02:34 PM
RE: Awake - by Wjames - 05-26-2024, 02:19 PM



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